Sometimes I wish a giant arrow would appear above my manuscript and pin-point the correct place to start. Alas, that does not happen.
An inciting moment is the moment of change for your character. It can be positive or negative, but it must be big enough that it forces him or her to act and to deal with the situation. This can be as big as a tank driving into the living room or as subtle as a discomforting sentence.
In your opening scene you should do three things:
- Orientate the reader: Get your reader orientated quickly. Tell us where we are and what is going on. You can be ambiguous, but do not confuse us.
- Introduce the characters: Who is there? Introduce your protagonist as soon as possible. I want to know what is happening, but most of all I want to know to whom it is happening.
- Show the relevance: Once I know where I am and what is going on you have to keep me interested. You have to make me ask questions.
In the Language of Flowers, Vanessa Diffenbaugh starts off by setting her protagonist’s bed on fire. What do I learn?
- Where are we? She is in a group home.
- Who is she? She has dreamt of fire for the last eight years. She has been in the foster-care system almost all her life. She is angry and violent. She knows about flowers.
- Moment of change: It is her 18th birthday so she must leave the home.
In Night Film, By Marisha Pessl our protagonist is running in Central Park at 2am when he sees a beautiful ghost-like woman in a red coat who seems to be following him. We know he is deeply unhappy, his life sucks and he blames Cordova.
- Where are we? In Central Park, New York in the early hours of the morning.
- Who is he? He is a journalist whose life has fallen apart because of a film director named Cordova. Immediately I want to know who Cordova is.
- Moment of change: He is shocked out of his apathy and inertia by this chilling Cordova-like incident.
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by Mia Botha for Writers Write